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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Capt.HuSsEiN

Hello everybody
how are you doing
i hope you very good







my English is so bad...

this is something i wrote and i hope you
help me to correct my mistakes


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there is no such a pure love people keep saying
and i was so close to believe because of what I've been through,
suddenly i found myself falling in love with you
such a pure love as the pure snow
before it fall from the sky.
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i loved you as well as the hotness of hell. I suffered
from that as someone is deadly ill. but after all
one word from you makes my world extremely thrill

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know give me your opinion about it

First i am not a teacher but i'll try .
i will not correct it because our friend Solitary passenger didn't give any one chance for that .
But i will modify it to looks better in my opinion .


Hello everybody
how are you doing
i hope you are very good



there is something i wrote and i want you to
help me in correcting my mistakes


people keep saying " there is no such a pure love"
and i was so close to believe in that because of what I've been through.
suddenly i found myself falling in love with you
such a pure love as the snow
before it fall from the sky.

My love for you seems like the hotness of hell . I suffered
from that as much as someone is deadly ill suffers.
But after all
one word from you would make my world extremely thrill


now give me your opinions about it


It was pretty good man . Thanks a lot