i need an english teacher

[Capt.HuSsEiN]

Hello everybody
how are you doing
i hope you very good

:)





my English is so bad... :(

this is something i wrote and i hope you
help me to correct my mistakes


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there is no such a pure love people keep saying
and i was so close to believe because of what I've been through,
suddenly i found myself falling in love with you
such a pure love as the pure snow
before it fall from the sky.
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i loved you as well as the hotness of hell. I suffered
from that as someone is deadly ill. but after all
one word from you makes my world extremely thrill

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know give me your opinion about it

;)

[Solitary passenger]

Hello everybody
how are you doing
i hope you are very good

:)





my English is so bad... :(

this is something i wrote and i want you to
help me in correcting my mistakes


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there is no such a pure love, people keep saying
and i was so close to believe In what I've been through,
suddenly i found myself falling in love with you
a pure love such as snow
before it fall from the sky.
----------


i loved you as well as the hotness of hell(your love looks like the hotness of hell). I suffered
from that as someone is deadly ill. but after all
one word from you would make my world extremely thrill

----------




now give me your opinions about it

;)




Your words were wanderful, as well as your skill. Go ahead.. MAY GOD BLESS YOUR WAY;)

[Capt.HuSsEiN]

thank you very very very much miss Solitary passenger you
:D

you really helped me a lot


so you think it's good?

because it was my first try in english
and i don't read english literature





people keep saying
and i was so close to believe In what I've been throughi meant some thing like:

i was so close to believe what people saying
because of what i've been through

i did't know how to say it


thank you again sis
i really appreciate it
:)

[ibrahim_n]

Hello everybody
how are you doing
i hope you very good

:)





my English is so bad... :(

this is something i wrote and i hope you
help me to correct my mistakes


---------

there is no such a pure love people keep saying
and i was so close to believe because of what I've been through,
suddenly i found myself falling in love with you
such a pure love as the pure snow
before it fall from the sky.
----------


i loved you as well as the hotness of hell. I suffered
from that as someone is deadly ill. but after all
one word from you makes my world extremely thrill

----------


know give me your opinion about it

;)




First i am not a teacher :D but i'll try :D .
i will not correct it because our friend Solitary passenger didn't give any one chance for that .
But i will modify it to looks better in my opinion .


Hello everybody
how are you doing
i hope you are very good



there is something i wrote and i want you to
help me in correcting my mistakes


people keep saying " there is no such a pure love"
and i was so close to believe in that because of what I've been through.
suddenly i found myself falling in love with you
such a pure love as the snow
before it fall from the sky.

My love for you seems like the hotness of hell . I suffered
from that as much as someone is deadly ill suffers.
But after all
one word from you would make my world extremely thrill


now give me your opinions about it


It was pretty good man . Thanks a lot

[Capt.HuSsEiN]

ibrahim_n

thank u bro
your modification is very nice
and i am glad you participated with us

:)

[-= pink =-]

what a wonderful words

Capt.HuSsEiN

nice feelings & perfect writing

I really like it

keep going

:)

[ibrahim_n]

It was such a big honour to participate in your pretty topic .
i guess you can start teaching us english .;)
And keep pleasing us with your poetry which was so touchy

[Capt.HuSsEiN]

-= pink =-


thank u so much sis

if there is something wonderful
its just because you've been here


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ibrahim_n

as they say (العين ما تعلى عالحاجب)
and what you said oh.. that's too much for me

i wish you the best

[ko0o0ke]

no it's ok your english i's good and can i help